Comments on: Secrets http://readbooksfree.net/2009/12/20/a-secret-love/ Read FREE Romance Novels Online! Wed, 07 Jul 2010 23:24:53 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ By: uninvoked http://readbooksfree.net/2009/12/20/a-secret-love/#comment-112 uninvoked Sun, 20 Dec 2009 21:37:00 +0000 http://readbooksfree.net/?p=624#comment-112 You've got a good start here, but may want to work on your dialog a bit more. I don't think even a love struck teen would use the term "dying embers" in conversation. I'll check back later. You've got a decent plot, better conflict, and a subtlety to some of the conflict layers that impresses me. You’ve got a good start here, but may want to work on your dialog a bit more. I don’t think even a love struck teen would use the term “dying embers” in conversation.

I’ll check back later. You’ve got a decent plot, better conflict, and a subtlety to some of the conflict layers that impresses me.

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